Last week's post with Mrs. Bennet was so much fun, I decided to add more from that scene. This comes from my WIP Betrothed to Mr. Darcy. You can find last week's snippet here.
From an upstairs window at Longbourn, Mrs. Bennet, Kitty and Mary are continuing to observe the arrival of the Darcys and Colonel Fitzwilliam. Mrs. Bennet and Kitty are particularly interested in Colonel Fitzwilliam.
“Mama,
he looked right at me,” Kitty exclaimed.
“Of course he did. Now let me look at you before you go and meet
him.” Mrs. Bennet tugged a bit here and
pushed a bit there to magically create a bosom where little had been before.
Mary
observed the process and said, “Illusions of beauty are quickly shattered. True
beauty lies in the virtuous soul of a young lady.”
“Oh
shut up!” Kitty and Mrs. Bennet chorused.
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I love this snippet! lol. The exchange is priceless, as is the description of creating a bosom. Wonderful 8! :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you! Mrs. Bennet was stuffing bras before they were even invented. Clearly a woman before her time.
DeleteLove the interaction between them!
ReplyDeleteThank you. They are all such different personalities that it is fun to imagine them interacting.
DeleteThis is one awesome dialog. Mary is so righteous, I wonder if she is not adopted or something.
ReplyDeleteHahaha. What a funny idea. I bet Mrs. Bennet wonders that herself sometimes.
DeleteMary tried so hard. "The only plain sister in a family of beauties" had to make up the deficit somewhere. I feel sorry for her really.
DeleteKate--you are quite the Janeite. I do feel badly for Mary. Stay tuned...she's going to get her own story soon.
DeleteAwesome! Very much looking forward to it, Violet!
DeleteNow that I've said it, I'll have to write it. Yikes! Once I finish Betrothed to Mr. Darcy I am going to write a series of short stories that will be combined in one book (no title yet) where each of the single women at Darcy and Lizzy's wedding take home a piece of wedding cake and dream about the man they will marry. So that will include Mary and Kitty Bennet, Georgiana Darcy and Caroline Bingley. Plus, I think I'll work Anne de Bourgh into the mix as well. It's fun to think about the possibilities.
DeleteLove this snippet. Give that girl some boobs, somehow. And Mary, such a goody two shoes, I wanted to smack her, too! LOL!
ReplyDeleteThank you! I had fun writing this part so I am glad others are enjoying it too.
DeleteThis is beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteYou have Mrs. Bennett and Kitty down--which means I want to shake them both for being so superficial. Though I suppose they're a product of their times.
And Mary is often right (have you noticed?) but she's so prim about it . . . :D
Thank you! Good point about Mary. She does have some issues with her delivery. :)
Deletehahaha I love it. You've captured the camaraderie and love between them wonderfully while showcasing the nerve wracking process of primping. Wonderful snippet.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Great point about the love and camaraderie. I think the Bennet household was chaotic, but still filled with fun and love.
DeleteI love your mix of humor.
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Thanks! I think humor makes just about everything better.
DeleteThe last line made me laugh. Fun snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jess! I bet they told her to shut up all the time.
DeleteYou've captured all three of them very well there.
ReplyDeleteThank you! Even though they are minor characters, JA did a great job of defining each of them.
DeleteLOL! Great characterizations of all three. But I doubt the good Colonel will pay serious court to any of the Bennet girls. He needs to marry for money if he is to maintain his accustomed lifestyle.
ReplyDeleteSpoken like a true Janeite! Yes, if The Colonel was going to go after any of the Bennet girls he would have pursued Lizzy when he met her, though he might have seen the way his cousin looked at her. One of the many mysteries of P and P.
DeletePoor Mary, always saying the wrong thing at the wrong time (even if she IS right). You captured the moment so well - excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Mary is sort of like a bull in a china shop, isn't she?
Deletehahaha I like true beauty! fun excerpt.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Mary always has something to say.
DeleteSo funny! Great job!
ReplyDeleteThanks. Glad you enjoyed it.
DeleteLOL Poor Mary. I confess to never having read the original Pride and Prejudice, so these characters are all new to me - but you're making me want to see if I can get it on my Kindle.
ReplyDeleteGood news---the original (and fabulous) Pride and Prejudice is not only available for Kindle, but it is FREE all the time. I highly recommend it.
DeleteCan I say I LOVE Mrs. Bennet? All the characters are distinct. Nice 8!
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Thank you! I love writing Mrs. Bennet and despite her brash behavior, she's not wrong to want to get her daughters married off.
DeleteGreat exchange. Looks like a fun story.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Not all of the book is as nutty as this bit, but there is quite a bit of humor. I can't seem to not add something funny when it strikes me.
DeleteGood snippet, Violet. I can really picture Mary and the others clearly.
ReplyDeleteThanks, that's a nice compliment.
DeleteWell done, love the touch of humor.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I just don't think that you can have Mary and Mrs. Bennet together w/o something funny happening.
DeleteOh my God! I don't know how I missed this last week, but this was hilarious! Is this book out? I want to read the whole thing!
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