This snippet is from my current Work In Progress, Betrothed to Mr. Darcy.
Their mother, evidently aroused by the sounds of them
entering, rushed to the top of the stairs to shout to her daughter, “Lizzy! You
must stop them. I know that your father will fight Mr. Darcy and will be killed
and then what shall happen to us? Mr. Collins and his dreadful wife Charlotte
will take possession of our home and turn us out into the cold.”
“Mama,” Elizabeth gathered all her good humor to respond to
her mother, “I am sure that the two of them will not come to blows. Please calm
yourself and I will investigate.”
“My nerves. Oh my nerves. As if planning weddings and
wedding clothes for two daughters wasn’t enough to tear my nerves to shreds,
now your father has angered Mr. Darcy and even if Mr. Darcy does not fight him,
he may well decide not to marry you. Oh, I knew it was too much to hope that a
man with ten thousand a year would marry you,
Elizabeth.”
Betrothed to Mr. Darcy follows Elizabeth Bennet as she prepares to marry Mr. Darcy. Despite her fervent wish to become his bride, Lizzy's sense of duty causes her to doubt the wisdom of forcing the Darcys to become associated with the vulgarity and silliness of the Bennet family.
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Poor Lizzy! I know Mrs B means well but I've often said "I'm glad she's not my mother!" I'm curious why Mr B and Darcy are at odds. I'm not always a fan of Mr B, either, but it's fun to see how various authors portray him.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the blurb. I bet Lizzy is so glad Pemberley is quite far away from Longbourn. Happy writing!
Monica
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Thanks for stopping by Monica! I agree, The Bennets are unlikely to win any parenting awards, but they are interesting to write as characters.
DeleteMr. Bennet is interesting because at first he seems like such a good father, but then if you read further, and read between the lines, he's not so impressive. And, as much as Mrs. Bennet is annoying, he is rude to her in front of her children and I don't care much for that.
Interesting premise, practically irresistible and of course nothing would go smoothly LOL. Excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteI hope that readers will find it irresistible! I am having fun writing it, that's for sure.
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Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors! I do so love P&P. The dialogue captures the essence of Mrs. Bennett quite nicely. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks! I'm glad to be here.
DeleteI'm glad you like my version of Mrs. Bennet. She's such fun to write about, though as I said above, not sure I'd want to actually know her.
Nice 8, and great characterization with Mrs. Bennet.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Elaine. I wouldn't want to write a whole book about Mrs. Bennet, but she's fun comic relief every now and then.
DeleteWelcome to WeWriWa. Great dialogue, and great 8. Nice!
ReplyDeleteThanks. I'm glad to participate. Looking forward to next week.
DeletePride and Prejudice? Sounds yummy.
ReplyDeleteYummy is always a good goal. Thanks for stopping by!
DeleteIf they actually did come to blows, would it be dueling, jousting or a fist fight? No matter what method they employed, I can not help but imagine they both fight like girls.
ReplyDeleteMr. Darcy fight like a girl? Blasphemy! What about that fencing lesson in the movie?
DeleteI do think that Bingley would be quite the slapper.